前记：第一次写读后续写，先让学生自由发挥，然后一看写得五花八门，这也是非常正常的。根据他们的所写，进行了一次学案编写。总的原则是：写对就可以了，不求高端词汇。
阅读下面材料，根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段，使之构成一篇完整的短文。
Sandro was born and grew up in Milan. Until he was 13 years old he never wanted to leave his hometown. But last year, Sandro's father's investment went bad, wiping out the family and sending his parents to prison. As a teenager under 16 years old, Sandro was forced to go to Newcastle in the northeast of England to stay with his uncle Lawrence.
Sandro had a lot of difficulties in the new environment. He didn't like the food in England. Nobody could forecast the weather in Newcastle. He had to start learning the second foreign language in his new school. Pocket money was not enough as usual. Almost every subject was a challenge for him. Most importantly, he had no friends. It seemed nobody knew him and he knew nobody in the school.
On an early summer evening, when Sandro was going home alone from school as usual, a man called him from behind. Sandro turned around and saw Eddie, his PE teacher, standing in front of him.
“You know the school will have a swimming competition next month. There will be all kinds of races. Will you participate?” Eddie asked.
Sandro took a look at Eddie with doubt and answered, “You sure? Me? No, l won’t. I can swim, but I'm slower than a snail.”
Eddie smiled and then said, “Yes. Indeed, you are, in breaststroke(蛙泳), in backstroke and in butterfly, but not in freestyle. So join the freestyle race! 200-meterfreestyle is the game suitable for you.”
Sandro was speechless at that moment. He had never known someone in the school was observing him and caring for him.
“I don’t think I can win anything.” Sandro was still a little puzzled.
“But you may get more recognition and consequently you can make some friends. That is more important than prizes.” Eddie responded immediately.
Having hesitated for a while, Sandro agreed to have a try.
注意: 续写词数应为150左右;
Every afternoon for the next month, Sandro trained really hard._______________________
Sandro dived into the pool confidently like other competitors._______________________
一、读后续写四步：
Step 1 Read for the theme （读主题）
Step 2 Read for the clues （找线索）
Step 3 Predict the plot （推情节）
Step 4 Write accurately and clearly （写：准确和清晰）
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Step 1 Read for the theme （读主题）
首先是读懂大意，请用两句话复述大意：
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然后是主题：每一篇读后续写都会有一个主题，而且只能有一个。而主题一很可能是文章中的：某个句子（某人说的话，通常是道理类、鼓励类等）。
如果不是某个句子，那么一定就是：一个人从消极、困难走向积极、克服困难。
请找出文章的这些句子:
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由此你得出什么样主题？
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Step 2 Read for the clues （找线索）
主题有了，要牢记一些可能用在续写中的线索，这在续写中，叫照应。学会照应，借助线索是拿高分的关键。
线索句子 |
如何续写中照应 |
Step 3 Predict the plot （推情节）
同学们，主题有了，线索有了，接下来才是推测情节。先确定提示句中的关键词，根据关键词来推测：
第一段：根据trained really hard. 推测：How did he train?
第二段：根据 dived into the pool confidently推测：
第一段的末句：_______________________________
第二段的第一句：How did he swim? What was the result?
提醒：写读后续写最大的问题是两个极端化：
1.想的太复杂，所以要写的太多 2.内容没啥可想，所以要写的太少
还有：3. 写的时候，对话太多（每段一个回合就可以了） 4. 没有提纲，导致情节拖沓，写不到点子上。
本文属于内容太简单，所以先这样确定内容：
Every afternoon for the next month, Sandro trained really hard.
提纲：Sandro practised every day. Soon, the big day came. It was his turn now.
Sandro dived into the pool confidently like other competitors.
提纲：He tried his best to swam fast and at last he won. All students cheered for him. He had won their recognition.
如果你能写出这样的，你已经成功了一半，接下来是未来读后续写你要做的事情：拓展丰富。读后续写的差距就此体现得体无完肤。有些学生想破脑袋也憋不出两句，而有的学生稍微思考就能洋洋洒洒。
其实，很简单。无非是：
1）把某个动作拆分成几个小动作（action）；
2）加上人物的想法和心情描写(thinking; emotion)；
3）适当把配角的回应放进来(response)；
4）加上环境描写（environment);
5）同时点缀文中的线索照应（clues)
答案：
Every afternoon for the next month, Sandro trained really hard.
1. Sandro practised every day. （加：action: 记住和改进每个动作；environment:风雨无阻；response:老师指导；clues: I'm slower than a snail.-->他终于不再像蜗牛一样了，而是……）
2. Soon, the big day came. It was his turn now.(加：emotion：开始紧张，但深吸一口气，很快冷静下来）
Sandro dived into the pool confidently like other competitors.
1. He tried his best to swam fast and at last he won.（加：thinking:想起老师说的话；心理开始倒计时）
2. All students cheered for him. （加：emotion：感动，眼里喊着泪水；action: 挥手；response: 老师朝他笑）
3. He had won their recognition. （通过老师的眼神来告知）
接下来，用汉语组织完整。汉语都表达不出来，英语肯定出问题的。这是经验。
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参考老师的答案：
Every afternoon for the next month, Sandro trained really hard.
Sandro不停练习，无论天气晴朗还是下雨。Sandro记住了每一个小动作，并去改进它，尽管经历了很多困难。他相信：Practice makes perfect. 他的老师很喜欢他的态度，给了他很多指导。（文章中的主要人物不要写丢了，记得穿插进去）没多久，这天就到了。他站在水池边上的时候，开始有一些紧张。他深吸一口气，很快冷静下来。
Sandro dived into the pool confidently like other competitors.
他想起了教练的话：这次比赛不仅仅是获奖。他要为赢得同学们的认可去游！想到这，他奋力赶上去。很快就到了最后30米了。他开始倒计时：30米，20米，10米！就在他到达终点的时刻，所有同学都为他欢呼！他赢了！他赢了！他眼里含着泪水，向人群挥手，他看见了Eddie朝他微笑，那眼神告诉他：他赢得了所有人的认可了！他将不再孤独。
Step 4 Write accurately and clearly （写：准确和清晰）
Every afternoon for the next month, Sandro trained really hard.
Sandro不停练习，无论天气晴朗还是下雨（whether ... or...)。
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Sandro记住了每一个小动作，并去改进它，尽管经历了很多困难。他相信：Practice makes perfect.
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他的老师很喜欢他的态度，给了他很多指导。
_______________________________
没多久，这天就到了。
______________________________
他站在水池边上的时候，开始有一些紧张。
_______________________________
他深吸一口气，很快冷静下来。
______________________________
Sandro dived into the pool confidently like other competitors.
他想起了教练的话：这次比赛不仅仅是获奖。
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他要为赢得同学们的认可去游！
_______________________________
想到这，他奋力赶上去。
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很快就到了最后30米了。他开始倒计时：30米，20米，10米！
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就在他到达终点的时刻，所有同学都为他欢呼！他赢了！他赢了！
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他眼里含着泪水，向人群挥手.
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他看见了Eddie朝他微笑，那眼神告诉他：他赢得了所有人的认可了！他将不再孤独。
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就这……
学习范文：
Every afternoon for the next month, Sandro trained really hard.
Whether it was windy or sunny, he kept practicing in the pool. To sharpen the swimming skills（提高技能）, the 13-year-old boy went to great lengths to （竭尽全力做…）practice every motion, regardless of (不管、不顾)great pains in all his muscles. In those days, Eddie always came in person, giving him professional guidance timely and patiently（及时、耐心地）. Gradually, with expert instructions from Eddie and his own great efforts, Sandro made significant progress（取得显著的进步）. His confidence was building up （越来越自信了）day by day. Finally, the big day came. With the bang of the starting gun（发令枪一响）, the race began.
Sandro dived into the pool confidently like other competitors.He swam with all his strength.His arms kept pulling (胳膊不停地划水) and his legs kept kicking（腿不停地踢水）, on and on（一直不停地持续着）. He shot in and out of the water smoothly(他快速自如地在水里穿梭). Finally, his efforts paid off ---- Sandro won the first place. All other players came to congratulate him.The stadium explodedwith thunderous applause （体育馆里爆发出雷鸣般的掌声）. Holding the medal in hand, Sandro felt his eyes moistened with tears（眼睛湿润了）. As teacher Eddie said, he won the recognition and respect from others. His life in England turned into a new chapter.
现在总结：
写好读后续写不一定要高级和短语，但一定要有以下句型的若干个，请翻译：
1.非谓语动词结构，即：SVO，doing... 或：Doing..., SVO
他的老师很喜欢他的态度，给了他很多指导。
他站在水池边上的时候，开始有一些紧张。
想到这，他奋力赶上去。
In those days, Eddie always came in person, giving him professional guidance timely and patiently（及时、耐心地）.
Holding the medal in hand, Sandro felt his eyes moistened with tears（眼睛湿润了）.
2. 形容词短语做状语结构，即：Adj.短语，SVO
他开始有一些紧张，但很快冷静下来。
3. 状语从句
Sandro不停练习，无论天气晴朗还是下雨（whether ... or...)。
Sandro记住了每一个小动作，并去改进它，尽管经历了很多困难。（though)
他深吸一口气，很快冷静下来。
4.时间衔接，即：不久；很快等
没多久，这天就到了。
Finally, his efforts paid off ---- Sandro won the first place.
5. With结构
他眼里含着泪水，向人群挥手。
With the bang of the starting gun（发令枪一响）, the race began.
除此之外，你必须牢记关于比赛类的常用表达，请全部找出来：
1.如何表达比赛前的心理：紧张，然后镇定
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2.如何表达为比赛的努力
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3.如何表达比赛中的拼搏
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4.如何表达比赛后得知结果的心理
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5.如何表达观众的欢呼
Key:
主题部分：
Sandro was born and grew up in Milan. Until he was 13 years old he never wanted to leave his hometown. But last year, Sandro's father's investment went bad, wiping out the family and sending his parents to prison. As a teenager under 16 years old, Sandro was forced to go to Newcastle in the northeast of England to stay with his uncle Lawrence.
Sandro had a lot of difficulties in the new environment.He didn't like the food in England. Nobody could forecast the weather in Newcastle. He had to start learning the second foreign language in his new school. Pocket money was not enough as usual. Almost every subject was a challenge for him. Most importantly, he had no friends. It seemed nobody knew him and he knew nobody in the school.
On an early summer evening, when Sandro was going home alone from school as usual, a man called him from behind. Sandro turned around and saw Eddie, his PE teacher, standing in front of him.
“You know the school will have a swimming competition next month. There will be all kinds of races. Will you participate?” Eddie asked.
Sandro took a look at Eddie with doubt and answered, “You sure? Me? No, l won’t. I can swim, butI'm slower than a snail.”
Eddie smiled and then said, “Yes. Indeed, you are, in breaststroke(蛙泳), in backstroke and in butterfly, but not in freestyle. So join the freestyle race! 200-meterfreestyle is the game suitable for you.”
Sandro was speechless at that moment. He had never known someone in the school was observing him and caring for him.
“I don’t think I can win anything.” Sandro was still a little puzzled.
“But you may get more recognition and consequently you can make some friends. That is more important than prizes.” Eddie responded immediately.
Having hesitated for a while, Sandro agreed to have a try.
整理：
1. Sandro had a lot of difficulties in the new environment.
2. Most importantly, he had no friends. It seemed nobody knew him and he knew nobody in the school.
3. He had never known someone in the school was observing him and caring for him.
4. “But you may get more recognition and consequently you can make some friends. That is more important than prizes.” Eddie responded immediately.
那么你得出什么样主题？
答案：
1. Sandro liked the new environment.
2. He began to have friends.
3. He won recognition.
翻译：
Every afternoon for the next month, Sandro trained really hard.
Sandro不停练习，无论天气晴朗还是下雨（whether ... or...)。Sandro对于每一个小动作都非常重视，他相信：Practice makes perfect. （细节描写）他的老师很喜欢他的态度，给了他很多指导。（文章中的主要人物不要写丢了，记得穿插进去）没多久，这天就到了。轮到他站在台上的时候，他开始有一些紧张，但很快冷静下来。
Sandro kept practising, whether it rained or not. He kept every small move in mind and improve it though he went through so much hardship. He firmly believed that practice makes perfect. Eddie liked his attitude very much, giving him much guidance. His efforts paid off. He no longer swam like a snail but a fish. It didn’t take long before the big day came. Nervous at first, he stood on the edge of the pool. He took a deep breath, trying to compose himself.
Sandrodived into the pool confidentlylike other competitors.
他想起了教练的话：这次比赛不仅仅是获奖。他要为赢得同学们的认可去游！想到这，他奋力赶上去。很快就到了最后30米了。他开始倒计时：30米，20米，10米！就在他到达终点的时刻，所有同学都为他欢呼！他赢了！他赢了！他眼里含着泪水，向人群挥手，他看见了Eddie朝他微笑，那眼神告诉他：他赢得了所有人的认可了！他将不再孤独。
He was reminded of Eddie’s words: the competition was more than a prize. He must fight for the recognition of his classmates! Thinking of that, he struggled to keep up. Soon, there was only the last 30 metres. He began count down the meters: 30 meters, 20 meters, 10 meters! Upon his arriving at the destination, all the students burst cheers for him. He won! He won! With tears in his eyes, he waved to the crowd. He saw Eddie smiling to him. His eyes seemed to tell him that he had won the recognition of all! He would be no longer lonely.
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